After the peer review session on Monday (10/7) I received a lot of feedback about expanding on my own personal argument and expressing more of what I had to say. Additionally, the possibility of adding onto my counterargument. Of course there we edits to be done grammatically, more specifically in the regard of sentence structure, run on sentences, wording, and simple typos. Furthermore, I did receive a good balance of positive feedback as well. Others felt that my evidence was very sufficient, and that my overall paragraphs were well written, aside from some of the slight grammatical errors. Also, the quotes I bring in from other authors and activists that also fit into the subject. 

When taking into account all of the feedback that was given to me I decided to rework my essay to fix the grammatical errors, so that it allowed for more calculated changes in what I wanted to do with expanding my paragraphs and then reorganizing them to allow the expansion of my own opinions. After implementing more of my own opinions, I put more effort into strengthening my counterargument. I realized that my counterargument was not as clear as I thought it was, so I made it more apparent for the reader to see.